Feralclaw/star if approved

Name:Feralclaw/star if accepted as leader

Nickname:Feral

Age (in moons):  well, this is going to be two different, 36 if warrior, 48 if leader.

Gender:Male

Clan:shadowclan!

Appearance: jet-black with blue eyes. scars running along his muzzle, one large scar over his right eye, slightly bigger than most tomcats, in height, lean muscles. Short haired. He has a longer than average tail and likes to flick others with it. He has several cuts in his right ear, and a small scar on the back of his left.

Personality:Quite the serious cat, almost always tense, he expects the worst out of things but will always tell others it's ok. he's very lenient around she-cats for reasons he never exposed. Despite his leniency around most she-cats, he's almost lazy around his mate, and also has a tendency to hunt her favorite prey. He finds arrogant cats who don't listen nor think things through annoying. He is a stout believer in starclan and thinks they guide his every footfall

Likes: She-cats, fighting, eating, loyalty

Dislikes:Frogs, he always lands in something! Arrogant cats who never listen.

Current mate:Hazelcloud... once she's made.

Family:matters little.

Hey Feral!!! So awesome to see you back haha. In order to become leader, youll have to change the form a bit. Make five sentences for appearance and five sentences for personality. Trust me, its easy. Just try to avoid making the sentences choppy.
Otherwise, its amazing XD

I'm trying super hard to break my comma use habit. And add things to my beloved feral XD

Lol, that's a good thing!

Help is requested

Smokey to the rescue xD
Okay, what do you need help with?

Having trouble adding stuff XD *peasant feral is peasant*

Oh, like the long descriptions and stuff? Why not take a look at other accepted advanced forms?
For description, make a sentence for every prominent part of Feralstar. Say 'his pelt is this color and is thick/thin. His eyes are this color. His claws are this long. His tail is like this. His whiskers and ears are like this. His paws are like this.' And that would be SIX sentences actually.
For his personality just focus on one little thing per a sentence. Write a sentence 'about his attitude towards something. Talk about his goals. How much he loves his mate. Does he believe in StarClan. What does he hope to do as leader.' And that would be five sentences.
But I really suggest looking at other accepted forms. Sunstar's by Roo was a very good one, though you don't need to be that advanced.

I'm at school so when I get home I'll fix it, thanks smoke!

Okay, no problem!

FIXED!
I hope

Fixed what exactly? ^.^

Just noticed it didn't save. Grrr. One sec I got all my ideas sorry xD

Lol, it's okay XD

Really fixed. Didn't count this time though.

That's good :D Accepted as ShadowClan leader!

Yaaay XD *spam reads that guide hard*

Lol definitely do that. I forgot to post the link with the accepted post XD
Do you want to RP his trip as deputy to the Moonfalls? I play Mochapaw (the only med. cat in ShadowClan because Moonleaf died before she became an apprentice if you remember that).

Sure! Lemme just touch up on stuff, and forgive if I suck bad since I'm just getting over my anger with people on my OTHER forum. Grr.. sutnev. Thumbs up if you Remeber that from firefly. But yes, I have risen from that hole too.

Lol, you'll get better. I will give you some of my skill XD
I'll start it if you'd like ^.^

If you want to, great *smoke* xD

Yeah sure. Give me a bit and it'll be up :D